First off, while I really like the piano part at the beginning, it doesn't really feel appropriate to me. I think you'd have a much greater impact if you cut that and started with the choir hit. Speaking of the choir, I honestly have no idea what the lyrics are or are supposed to be, but it sounds like they're singing "Suck my dick." Not even kidding, that's just what it sounds like. The orchestral part is powerful and I like the triplet rhythm. The B section with the strings is beautiful and well thought out in terms of the pizzicato support section. I do think that you loop the last string part a few times too many for it to have any meaning.
Really cool, dramatic piece.
Thank you very much for the feedback! I agree completely with the piano at the beginning being a bit out of place now that you mention it, I'll admit I rushed a bit with this song and didn't quite know what to put for the beginning. But thanks to your feedback I'll be sure to put much more direction into the composition next time!
By the way the choir IS exactly singing "suck my dick" I'm not sure if/where I have to specify that this song has bad language in it.
Really cool sounding stuff! I like the synth at :25. It's got a nice feel to it. There's also this cool pulse in the background; it sounds like the reverb on your kick, and it's just this cool swooshy feel to it. You had a good sample for the piano, and the pad in the background is simple and nice-sounding, if a little buzzy. I think my main gripe with this is that you have a great opportunity to explore a chord change after the synth comes in, but you just loop back to the beginning. For an ambient loop like this, there's nothing wrong with repetition, but I'd just love for you to surprise me with a B section to the loop.
Good sounds, good rhythm, basic composition. Cool stuff.
Thanks for your review! It has a lot of substance, it's really informative.
I dunno if you got zero-bombed or what, but this piece doesn't deserve the rating it has. This is a great ambient chillout piece with some unique sounds and textures. Granted, you could probably halve the time of each section, but as is it works great for background music and the like. Great production value, I can tell you put a lot of time into this.
You deserve a much better score for this; I'll be looking out for your album!
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For me, the biggest turn-off for this song is the bass. I don't know whether you programmed it or used a preset, but it's just really atonal and annoying. It didn't match up rhythmically or melodically with the rest of the song. However, the rest of the song was good. Very minimal, chillout sounds. Even if it was kind of repetitive, I enjoyed it.
Keep up the good work, hopefully your next song really blows me away!
Thanks for the review. Sorry if you didn't like the bass, but I personally believe it to have a quite catchy rhythm, haha. I hope you enjoy my other works more, should you choose to check them out!
I am absolutely in love with this music. The melody and ambiance all really make me feel like I'm on an underwater voyage (great title, by the way). So uplifting, yet still very chill and laid back.
I think you could have a few improvements on the mixing in this song, though...maybe make the drums a bit louder during the main sections. And there are points where there are a lot of different instruments going at once where I can't really tell which instrument has the melody. Maybe making the main melody stand out a little more would help?
5 stars and downloaded. Please keep making more stuff like this.
Great, with room for improvement
Let me start by saying that this is really an excellent song. The hook's infectious, the drums are all well done, and the bass is solid. The mixing/mastering are also top notch, which is a major bonus. I like this song a lot.
However, I feel like there was a little room for you to explore some different melodies or instruments. A little variation in the middle or towards the end, especially during the breakdown, would go a long way.
I hope you make more tracks like this that blow me away! :)
Definitely some work to be done for next time.
With regards to the song, there are some major problems. The thing that jumps out immediately is how stilted the timing is; it sounds like it was recorded on a MIDI, but the timing was off during the recording and you never fixed it during production. Either that, or you used a piano roll-type instrument and put the notes in manually, without fixing the timing in production. The loop is simplistic, which isn't necessarily bad, but the instrument you chose for it doesn't stand well as a solo. I would recommend either going with an instrument that could pass as a solo (a string ensemble, a guitar, etc.), or, preferably, adding something into the background. The melody isn't complex or good enough to stand on its own. As well, it seems like you only have two actual parts to the song, which each loop once with a different ending. Layering some more parts would go towards solving that problem.
I hate to write about score in a review, but I'm actually a bit incredulous at how this got onto the Top 30. It doesn't deserve to be there in my opinion.
I hope you continue to improve on your music, and I hope that some of my review will be useful to you.
Thank you for bothering to review it, but this is not a song I did to earn a reward. Anyway I appreciate your tips, and I will use it when I compose a real song.
And I agree with you that this loop should not be in top 30.
I just up this song because it's funny =)
Wow. This is one of the best tracks I've ever heard on the Audio Portal. It's really smooth, but never boring. Every note blends together perfectly, all the instruments fit together, the mastering is terrific and the song itself is simply made of win. Your percussion came in at just the right time, was excellently done. It complements the main melody well. You mixed the styles you mentioned expertly; I like the dub around 2:05. Even when you add that techno style in, you don't lose that soft feeling of the piano in the background, and you always return to your main piece. Keep making music like this and you'll be a hit. I know I'll be following you.
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Sounds like potential to me
You seem to have a good grasp on how different parts of the song fit together. I enjoyed listening as you built it up. I also like your choice of instrumentation; the strings went together nicely with the bells. You also kept things interesting all the way through by not getting stuck in a rut, but still having a recurring theme to return to.
I think the biggest downside to the song is rhythm. It sounds like you have a triplety feel during most of it, but in the very beginning and towards the end you have some abrupt silences. I get that those were supposed to be big dramatic moments, but it really just made the song feel stilted. I'd suggest adding some stronger percussion to compensate. As well, I'd like to see you branch out and try a track with a lot of different sounds in it.
You have a good ear for coming up with melodies I think, as well as blending the notes together. I hope to see you improve upon this in the future.
Rhythm isn't something I considered nearly as much as I probably should have, I'll admit. As for percussion, I was rather limited in my choice; the program I have doesn't have very many percussion instruments included. Thanks for the comment, though.
Great uplifting little tune
Wow, this tune actually made me feel really giddy. I love the main synth part, but the backup instruments really made it for me. They accompany so well, but can take over the melody when they need to. The drums were also swell, nicely done. I like that little log-drum-esque instrument you used in the beginning and throughout.
One qualm would be that the end part of the loop feels a little anticlimactic...maybe add a rise or some cymbals in there that would make it feel like a more complete part of the song?
I could see this being an intro to a game, or the victory song after a race. Not quite epic enough to be after a real big battle, but something smaller would work. I hope this song finds its way into something like that. Keep producing!
Thank you very much for the feedback, man.
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